Lazy rainy Sunday

Feels like it should be the start of a poem, doesn’t it?

On a lazy, rainy Sunday
lonely drops seek company
only to be driven apart by ignorant tires
unaware of what it’s like to be the rain
on a lazy, rainy Sunday.


quick edit – Maybe the lines ought to be –

On a lazy, rainy Sunday
lonely drops seek company
only to be driven apart by tired ignorance,
those unaware of what it’s like to be the rain
on a lazy, rainy Sunday.

Which do you like better?

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2 Responses to Lazy rainy Sunday

  1. tmso says:

    Both. The second doesn’t quite have the same nuance without the first.

  2. 1minionsopinion says:

    I wasn’t sure if the play on words would work. Maybe I’ll take another run at it the next time it rains.

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